We didn’t get the grant.
We’ve been talking about coming up with a completely new story to improve the script, which was the weakest part of our submitted story.
So, let’s bullet point some ideas!
Adrift (take 2)
- Young business man (age 25~35) works 9~5 at a big company in a seaside metropolis (like Manhattan Island).
-Lives in one of many tall square narrow houses squashed tightly against each other. Not much room between houses. Small (3mx3m) backyard with a water tight fence (barricade?) that falls off straight into the sea.
-Has a strict day to day routine. Gets up at 7am. Leaves home by 8am. Arrives to work at 9am.
Call to adventure
-One day, at precisely 8am, he opens his front door to leave his home for work. But instead of landing his foot on the foot path, he falls straight into a body of water.
-He panics but manages to climb back into his front door. As he coughs up water he looks up outside the front door and sees the open sea.
-Confused. Ocean view should be the backyard. He checks the backyard and sees the open sea. Looks out the windows that should be looking straight at the neighbor’s brick wall but again sees the open sea. Goes up stairs to the deck.
-He realises that his house is floating in the middle of the ocean.
Refusal of the call
-Takes out his cellphone from his pocket with the intention of calling for help. His cellphone is wet, thus dead from his fall.
-Goes to his home phone. Realises he doesn’t have a home phone (who does now a days??).
-Home computer wont turn on. The whole house has lost electricity.
-He turns on his laptop. It turns on! Opens chrome to check his facebook and reddit (naturally as one would do in an emergency situation). No connection to the internet. Then battery runs out!
-He screams out in pain.
-He’s all alone in the middle of the ocean.
-The ocean is calm.
-He is seated on the couch in a brace position like the pose you’d see on airplane safety manuals. In deep thought and panic mode.
-He can’t accept the fact the his house is floating in the middle of the ocean.
-He thinks it’s a dream. He want to wake up! Is he going crazy??
-He goes outside to the backyard. Walks back and forth and looks towards the distance in all directions keeping a look out for any signs of people (or anything that resembles civilisation). Bobs his head from side to side like a pigeon or a crazy person in a psychiatric hospital (?).
-Ominous cloud starts to form in the distance. The ocean becomes more choppy. The floating island begins to rock.
The road of trials
-It’s a storm!
-The whole house is shaking. Creaking. Snapping. Plates smashing. Picture frames falling. Glass everywhere. Furniture tumbling everywhere. Cupboards falling and crashing. The whole house looks like it’s gonna crumble.
-He has no choice but to go outside and observe the house being shaken by the ocean like a miniature doll house.
-Crouched on the wet lawn trying to keep warm but he is absolutely soaked.
-He starts to get very nauseous and chunders over the fence into the ocean as if he is spewing off the deck of a boat.
-Lies down on the wet lawn. drenched in rain.
-Things cant get much worse.
-He wake up to a beautiful calm day. He notices he’s still in the middle of the ocean.
-Looks out the ocean but sees no one.
-His shirt is still soaked so he take it off to keep dry.
-The house it still standing but took a big beating.
-Inside is much worse. It’s a dump.
-His stomach grumbles. He carefully, avoiding the glass, makes his way to the fridge for food.
-The power is off so everything in the fridge is warm. It’s starting to stink too.
-He finds a cooler box and stores fresh food in it.
-Montage of him cleaning the house. (what does he clean? find? discover?)
-Running out of food. Food rotting.
-no friends (only a volleyball with a face drawn on it).
-no more food to eat.
-plants the remaining vegetables in his backyard. Will it grow??
-fashions a fishing rod out of wood panels. Hooks out of bone and glass. wire out of electrical wire.
-makes sails out of tarpaulin.
-weaves flax for baskets.
-he is retarded when it comes to survival skills
The Ultimate Boon
-He eventually, after many ups and downs, manages to construct a self-sustaining floating island. Grows his own vegetables. Catches fish. Making compost out of food waste and human waste. Wind/solar powered electricity. etc.
-His goal of returning home has become less important.
-starts to become comfortable with his new life.
Refusal of the Return
-One day he wakes up, gets out of bed and casts his fishing rod out his front door.
-Instead of the bait landing into the ocean, it hooks a passing truck and yanks the fishing rod out of his hands.
-He floating island has somehow made it’s way back to the big city and slotted back to its original spot.
-His house use to look identical to other houses in the neighborhood but now it stands out. It has completely transformed into something very unique.
The Crossing of the Return Threshold
-Confused. Mixed feelings about being back home.
-It’s now 8:35am. He’s gonna be late for work!
-rushes off to work .
-Decides to stay in the big city? or does he set sail back the the sea?